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The Freshman: Game of Love Chapter 1

[Original] Zack and Brandon were talking about the couples challenge, in which couples compete in a contest and see which one is the best. The main character could pick either Chris, James, or Kaitlyn to be her partner for the contest. If the character picks Chris, he would show up by the door and overheard his name. The same scenario applied to James and Kaitlyn if the Main Character chose them. The competition were judged by Twombly, Professor Vasquez, and Edgar. Edgar wanted to enter the contest with Cassandra but since video game characters do not count, he helps out with the contest.

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[Proposed Edit] Returning from a class in the days leading up to Valentine's Day, Your Character overhears Zack and Tyler talking about the annual Couples' Challenge run by the university where couples compete to declare the cutest couple on campus. Learning the winners are treated to an all-expenses-paid luxurious Valentine's Date, you decide to enter the contest with your partner who may be either Chris, James, or Kaitlyn. On the morning of the competition you meet in the ballroom with Zack and Brandon, Tyler and Abbie, and Becca and Sebastian among the hopeful couples. You learn that Edgar had intended on entering the contest with Cassandra Pentaghast however given video game characters were not qualified as participants, he instead participates by helping set-up and oversee the contest. After being introduced to the judges, Helen Twombly and Professor Vasquez, you begin the challenges.



Abbie + Tyler Relationship

[Original] In Book 1, Tyler has a massive crush on Abbie. She later starts to like him too but both don't know how to make a move on one another. A lot of misunderstanding and Leila's flirtations complicate the situation.

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[Proposed Edit] In Book 1, Tyler had developed strong feelings for Abbie. She later begins to return his feelings but both are unsure of how to initiate anything, with a number of misunderstandings and Leila's flirtations complicating the situation.



Page introductions -> italicising Chapters and Series names on first mentioning, removing quotation marks eg. "The Freshman, Chapter 3" -> The Freshman, Chapter 3