Talk:Across the Void/@comment-33511732-20181003154520

Things PB should do now to save this book:

- Cut completely the section of the siblings: I get it when they want to make the players to see from different point of views. But this leads to the story being all over the places. Although people hate ROE, but I have to say that they actually do this sibling things better than ATV. By cutting out the siblings, the story can be more focused.

- Since the siblings would be unplayable, it's ideal to transfer Lyra, Holmes, and Zaniah to be MC's potential LIs. It would increase the LIs of MC from 5 to 8 (4 boys and 4 girls, this is more balance)

Just my two cents :p