Thread:MondlichtPanda/@comment-3452092-20190714133009/@comment-36836718-20190714165004

Copypasting some of the notes I took of the previous thread
 * WT: Michael Xiao (Jadelady)
 * PtR: William Langdon (Mondlichtpanda)
 * Platinum: Micah
 * Queen Eleanor
 * Ellis Knight
 * Xenocrates
 * Theia

Theia will probably appear in the near future and even if not, we have a picture, and her section is kinda long already. I am currently disappointed of Micah's appearances in the last 3 chapters. He was simply there to be there. If they had left him out and MC had said "I am currently working with him on...", it would have the same effect. I hope he is more involved in the story in the next chapters...

Pages where we/I noticed something's off
 * Gloria (odd grammar)
 * Addison Sinclair (lack of content and odd grammar)
 * info about number of Kamilah Sayeed's brothers may lead to redundant trivia point
 * Writers at Pixelberry
 * Ahmed Khabbaz and Benfica/Dragons and "his plays" (odd content and grammar)
 * The Order of the Dawn... page has structural problems
 * figuring out how to call Serafine Dupont's power of accessing MC's memories

I think Mondlichtpanda made a suggestion on how to include credit on the Writers of Pixelberry page to make clear that some of the info came from 1-2 sources outside PB but not all of it. However, we didn't discuss it any further...

And I stop here because that's already enough info for one comment.