Talk:Baby Bump, Book 1/@comment-27870373-20200225071029

Okay, WHAT the actual hell. I’ve had my problems with this book from the beginning, but now it’s really come to a head.

This is literally the most poorly written book I’ve ever read. Both in terms of the storyline AND the actual writing. Like, I wanna pull my hair out every time they refer to female Dixon as ‘he/him’, but this is a common mistake with gender-customizable LI’s, so that can’t entirely be blamed on this one book.

But then this happened: the info given in the limo in chapter 11. We had to do a whole process of ‘stay up, don’t sleep, stay awake’ to get three USELESS pieces of information. Senator Fairchild’s significance presented itself only ONCE to give is exactly 1 out of like 20 points we needed to get a good rep. Senator Blythe NEVER showed up at all.

But then, the icing on the cake: The governor’s wife. We were told specifically that her name was CAROLINE. But, when we introduce ourselves to her, what happens?...

‘Please, call me ABIGAIL’

Madre de Dios, I’ve never seen such terrible writing in my LIFE >.<